老师让写一篇英语作文，我写完了，但肯定错的地方很多，希望老师们能帮我看看哪些地方错了，还有哪些句型的应用更适合这篇文章，谢谢！

中文：我有一个梦想——中国强大、民族富强。
曾经有一位名人说过：少年强、中国强。
我的国家中国：幅员辽阔、地大物博、上传壮丽、古迹遍地、民族众多、民族奇异。但是国内贫富差距大，仍有许多的小孩上不起学，贫困地区众多，国外各国对中国的褒贬不一，并不是看上去那么好。
我有一个梦想，希望中国强大、民族富强。就像歌中唱的那样：我愿守土复开疆，堂堂中国要让四方——来贺。”
我有一个梦想，希望中国强大、民族富强。就像《大同》里说的那样：人们不只是敬爱自己的父母，不只是疼爱自己的子女。使老年人得到善终，青壮年人充分施展其才能，少年儿童有使他们成长的条件和措施。老而无妻者等都有供养他们的措施。男人有职份，女人有夫家。
到那时我会为更为中国的强大自豪骄傲，在那天到来之前，我会好好学习，天天向上。梦想将在不远处向我们招手，我憧憬着、期盼着。
我有一个梦想，那是这——中国强大、民族富强。

英文：I have a dream - the powerful and prosperous nation.

A celebrity who said: Junior strong, strong China.

My country, China: vast, vast territory and abundant resources, upload magnificent monuments everywhere, many national, ethnic singularity. However, the domestic gap between rich and poor, and there are still many children can not afford to go study, number of poverty-stricken areas, foreign countries to China vary not look so good.

I have a dream, I hope China is strong, prosperous and powerful nation. Like to sing the song as: I would like to defend their territory to break complex, detract from the fact that the Chinese want the Quartet - to HE. "

I have a dream, I hope China is strong, prosperous and powerful nation. As "common ground" and said: People do not just love their parents, not only love their own children. Hospice to enable the elderly, young and middle-aged people to fully display their talents, the children make their growth conditions and measures. Without families, such as the wife has to support them. Level of men, women have a husband.

By that time I will be more proud of China's strong pride in the day before, I will study well and up every day. Not far away, a dream will be waving to us, I look forward to, and look forward to.

I have a dream, it is this - the powerful, prosperous nation.

the powerful and prosperous nation改为China's powerful and
prosperous. A celebrity who said中将who 改为have.将第一个VAST去掉。民族众多可译为multi rethics.民族起奇异可译especial
rethics. foreign countries to China vary not look so good.改为the adjustment that the other countries made to China
are different completely.It's not so good as the apperance. I hope China is strong, prosperous改为I hope China get much stronger and prosperous.就像歌中唱的那样：我愿守土复开疆，堂堂中国要让四方——来贺。”译为just like the song:I would like to defend our territoryand widen it.all the other countries will say"congratulation"to China .the children make their growth conditions and measures改为the children are provided suitable conditions and measures for their growth.study well改为study hard